B9415005 (A2)

Assignment 2(2nd edition):Compare and contrast living at home and in the dormitory

In all the universities, [[there have two parts in students about the place they leave]]==>there are two kinds of places that students can choose to live: living at home and (or) living in the dormitory. [[Both of two kinds of students have the feeling about the lifestyle and feel that living at home or in the dormitory is better.]]==>??? What's the difference [[What are the differences]] between them? First, [[compare to]]==>in terms of lifestyle, living in the dormitory can have more free time to let students do what they want to do every time. Maybe we can go shopping [[after the last class]]==> after class, go to KTV with friends in (on) the weekends. Everything can be decided by us! For living at home, it (we) can not have more free time because of parents. Parents usually worried (worry) about their children and limit there (their) free time. Maybe it is becasue parents want you to study every evening or on the weekend. However, the lifestyle living at home is more normal than living in the dormitory. [[If someone]]==>For those who living in the dormitory, he or she may spend the midnight to play computer games or watch the movies and (to) harm his or her health. Second, [[compare to the cost, living in the dormitory must have to pay more money in the lives]]==>the expenses of living in the dormitory is higher than those of living at home, (just like)==>such as the dorm rate (fees), water rate (fees), meal cost (the cost for three measls)..., and so on. For some people which is (who are) poor, it is a burden. [[The students living at home have no problem about these costs]]==>For those students who live at home, they do not have such problems. Parents prepare the lunch and dinner, all [[ the cost about lives]]==>living cost, and a room for us. Therefore, we don't (do not) have to worry about that if we living (live) at home. Third, [[compare to]]==>in terms of the relationship, living in the dormitory (can0==>allows us to have more time to chat and talk about the homework with classmates. Therefore, the students living in the dormitory have better relationship with classmates than those who live at home. According to the differences between living in the dormitory and at home, I think both have different advantages to attract people to choose. If you want to be independent, living in the dormitory is a good choice; if you want a good relationship with family (your families), just live at home (living at home is a good idea). [[It's fixed at the discretion of yourself.]]==>Do you mean "It all depends on your choice and preference."?

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