B9409026 (A2)

Compare and contrast living at home and in the dormitory(2st)

I think live (living) at home and in the dormitory are very different. First, when I live at home, my parents always buy dinner for me. And my Mom always clean the environment of our home. Sometimes when I want to go where I want to go, my parents can take me to the place. But live (living) in the dormitory, I must do that by myself. If I want to eat something, I have to go out to buy that. Or if I want to go some place , I must walk or take the bus to go there. And when I see the room become dirty, I will (need to) clean the room by myself. Second, I think our parents always take care of us when we are at home. But now I am living in the dormitory , sometimes I don't take care of my body (do not take care myself well), [[at this time]]==>therefore, my roommates always warn me to eat well so that my body can become good. When I am sick, my roommates always [[with me]]==>accompany me to see the doctor and we always go out together. [[They're assiduity]]==>Their assistance always let (make) me feel that they are just like my family. Even now , my parents are not with me, but my roommates [[instead of my parents , let I don't feel I'm along]]==>are just like my family which makes me feel that I am not alone. Third, if I live at home, I will feel not free, I can't (cannot) do the things that I want to do, and my parents will (bridle)==?? me. I don't (do not) like that. For example, if I want to go out at midnight , my parents can't (cannot) agree with it. [[Or]]==>However, if I live in the dormitory, when I want to go some place to play, I don't have to tell my parents abot that. [[Live in the dormitory , I can do that , I don't need to let my parents agree that.]]==delete this sentence.

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