A9415035 (A2)

Compare and contrast living at home and in the dormitory (#2)

Lots of student went (go) to a school far away from their hometowns and necessary(need) to live in the dormitory. [[which comes up many different to student who lives at home. Each has advantages and disadvantages about convenient, cost and independent.]]==>There are many differences between living in the dormitory and at home in terms of conenience, living expenses, and independence. About convenient (convenience), [[to live in dormitory can walk to school in little time.]]==>if you live in the dormitory, you can walk to school in just a short time. It doesn't take too much time on the way to school and back to home(the dormitory); therefore, you can gain (save) much more time to do the (your) homework or do exercise. [[The more less cost is to live at home and it could save more money because you don't pay the rent for the dormitory basically]]===???Do you mean that "However, living at home, you can save more money than living in the dormitory because you do not have to pay the rent, and eating at home is cheaper than eating outside. [[Someone wants being independent is to live in dormitory, which is good at learning independent. ]]==>Nevertheless, if someone wants to learn to be independent, it is better for him to live in the dormitory because you have to do everything by yourself, such as washing clothes, cleaning your room, buying stuffs that you needed (need). In my opinion, living in the dormitory is much better than living at home [[base on its learning independent.]]==>for learning to be independent. Because (the independent)==>independence will never be learned at home.

***Really need to pay attention to the organization of your main points, grammar, the word usage, and how to well link the sentences.