B9213028 (A2)

Compare and contrast living in the dormitory and living in an apartment.

[[There have some]]==>There are adventages and disadventages of (for) living in the dormitory and an apartment for me. But if let me choose again,I will still choose to live in an aprtment. [[There have three topic points of comparrison from my experience : have own room or not, easy to know new friend or not,cost cheep or expensive.]]==>From my experienc, the main differences between living in the dormitory and an apartment are privacy, matter of making friends, and living expenses. There have (There are) five people living in a room of the dormitory. I am afrid of any voice when I sleep, so I was always the lastest (last) person to fall asleep when I lived in the dormitory. (When I Living)==>I am living in an apartment now. I have my own room, I can go to bed anytime and do anything I want to do. But living in the dormitory (can)=>is easy to know new friends then (than) living in an apartment. When I lived in in the dormitory, I know (knew) some firends who (is major)==>majored in design. We still have contact now, and I can ask some questions about their major to help my assignment. We often chatted, watched movies in the room . Living in the (an) apartment is more expensive then (than) living in the dormitory. Living in the apartment, I have extra spending, like rent, charge for water electricity, networking, gas，etc . We need to write (record) what I (we) spend (spent) and control some shopping desire，or you will [[find why I cost]]==>not know why you have spent so much money. Living in the dormitory is to learn how to [[do with some person and consideration]]==>get along with people and have consideration for each other . Living in an apartment have (has) more freedom but we need to learn how to control oneself (ourselves).

***Adequate description of comparing both sides of living in the dormitory and in an apartment. But please pay attention to your grammar and the organizaton of the main points.