B9415002 (A3)

The Effects of an Invention or Innovation in Modern Life (II)

The Internet without doubt is one of the most important inventions in modern life, maybe the one that mostly changed our life style.

The Information delivery really changed in a positive way thanks to the Internet. You can be informed about the entire world only with some clicks by reading newspapers from countries that perhaps you never heard about and also seeing their television channels. (Does not)=>No matter where you are, if you have a computer and Internet connection you can know everything important that happened in your country.

Entertainment is [[other of the good points of]]==>another advantage of the Internet. [[you can pass hours and hours explore the web and do not feel boring]]==>You can indulge yourself in exploring the Internet without feeling bored. On-line games, music, videos and all that you can imagine [[is certainly exist]]==>are inside this virtual world. However, we need to be [[carefully]]==>careful about the use of the Internet and do not become addicted to it because this (is already one)=>has become a problem in the modern society.

I consider that the other two important (facilities)=>functions of the Internet are the e-mail and e-business. E-mail is faster and cheaper than regular Post Office mail, so it inevitably became the most popular way to communicate with family or friends; therefore, the number of users continues rising. Then, we have the giant e-business, which (became)=>has become more and more popular around the world; clothes, books, cd’s (CDs), cosmetics, foods, and much more [[is ready to buy in]]==>are available on the Internet. For convenience and some times (sometimes) price, shopping on-line is the option that a lot of people choose every day.

In conclusion, I think that the invention of the Internet makes our lives easier in (different)=>many ways and is already part of our lives. [[from now we can enjoy the advantages that the Internet offer to us without became addict to it!]]==>From now on, we should try to enjoy the advantages that the Internet bring us without becoming addicted to it!

***In your article, you talk about both the change and function of the Internet. You might want to make your article more focused by making a thesis statement to include the main points that you want to discuss. "...mostly changed our life style." seems a too general statement.